Sentence problems 1--excessive prepositions
What's wrong with this sentence?
- A knowledge of correct trial procedure is the duty of all of the members of the bar of this state.
- All the state's bar members must know correct trial procedure.
Here is a real sentence my sister sent me. A lawyer wrote it:
- There is no current estimate of the number of boxes of records in possession of the schools.
So let's put an actor in the sentence and rewrite to avoid excessive prepositions:
- We have not estimated how many boxes of records the schools have.
--Excerpted from Better Legal Writing